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Animal species are becoming extinct as a result of human activities on land and in sea. Why has this happened? What’s the solution? (ENVIRONMENT)

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Many
species
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 of
animals
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 are endangered as compared to the past. There are many activities carried out by humans on
the
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land
areas
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as well as
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 in
sea
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areas
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 that adversely affect the existence of many
species
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 of
animals
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. The reasons and solutions will be thoroughly discussed in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, forest
areas
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 are replaced with industries and lands for
animals
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 are stolen by human beings.
As a result
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, forest
areas
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 are becoming shorter and it is hard for
animals
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 to find a wide open space to live.
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, many regions are facing the terror of wild
animals
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 entering residential
areas
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 because they do not have enough needed space. Another scenario to look upon is the terror of humans toward
sea
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 creatures. Lots of
waste
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is
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disposed
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 in the seas
have
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 become very dangerous for
sea
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animals
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 to survive and
hence
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 their numbers are significantly decreasing. There are a few measures which shall be taken to tackle
such
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 problems.
Firstly
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, as lots of forest
areas
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 are invaded by human-constructed buildings, zoos and natural parks should be constructed. To elaborate creating
such
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 spaces will allow the
animals
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 to
further
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 populate their
species
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 protecting them from endangering.
Secondly
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, measures for the management of
sea
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waste
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 should be taken. In simple words, the less
sea
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waste
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, the more the number of
species
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.
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, plastics and other toxic
waste
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 are very harmful to the survival of
sea
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 organisms which will be benefitted if
waste
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 is dealt with in other ways.
To conclude
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, there are many ways which hinder the increment of the population of
animals
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 in the
sea
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as well as
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 on land, but with proper measures like building artificial
areas
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 for the
animals
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 and proper
waste
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 disposal systems should deal with the issue to a great extent.
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