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Online education is vecoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace fave-to- face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 century, most university learners opt to do other
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 other than sciences because of certain reasons. The essay below will discuss the causes of
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 and the effects it has on society. First and foremost, most schools offering
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 are very expensive and cannot be afforded by many in society.
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, parents send their children to places they can afford.
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,
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 are deemed as special courses which can only be done by brilliant people.
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 reason, it is difficult to get a place to study for
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 degrees because the
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 required are just too high.
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, in Zimbabwe, for one to study chemical engineering, one must have passed three
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 with more than 14
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. Scoring
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 is not possible for many considering the learning standards in the country.
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, most individuals decide to do other courses in other fields. Moving on, the community faces problems because of
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,
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, some children fail to meet their dreams because of expensive fees their parents fail to raise.
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, demanding high
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 to enrol students in
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 is unfair as it places those doing other courses as inferior.
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, in most universities in Africa, learners in other departments are considered to be less intelligent.
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 reason, the student representative committee president is mostly chosen from the department of sciences.
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, in many countries a few people do
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subjects
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 when they go to university because of the expensive fees and the high grades required.
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 affects society in a negative way as it creates differences and destroys some dreams. These and more issues have been discussed in the essay above.

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