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it is better to keep the same work throughout someone´s life than change it. do you agrre?

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Work
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 organisation has been witnessing several changes over the recent years.
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 some employers, who are more courageous and adventurous, choose to have a variety of experiences over their working time, others would strongly argue that keeping it in the same place is rather preferable.
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 I, undoubtedly, agree with the former perspective, in
this
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 essay, I will explore both sides of the argument. There are enormous advantages, which can be hard to weigh, regarding whether someone should remain in the same company throughout their working
life
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 or move on. First of all,
people
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 who keep the same job, often state that they manage to keep a better balance between their working
life
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 and social
life
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,
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 is because most of the time they
work
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 near home.
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,
this
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 stability is one of the reasons that expel them from leaving that organisation.
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, they argue that, gradually, as they become rather experienced in their
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, they are more likely to have an upgrade of their job, and
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, jump on the companies´ hierarchy.
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,
this
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 might, eventually, mean having higher salary perspectives.
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, in my
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 not all employers manage to offer satisfactory
work
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 realisation/salary balances. In order to pursue their dreams, individuals, who are more career focused, frequently try different types of workplaces and even non-similar jobs.
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 that often means spending time commuting, that
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 brings more excitement.
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, someone who just recently moved to a multinational company in a large city is more likely to have colleagues from all over the world,
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, having the opportunity to know different
people
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 and cultures. If these
people
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 would not change jobs, they could often regret their
life
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 choices, and thereby not experienced a professional realisation.
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, it is commonly observed sharp rises in pay rates
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 these moves, bring the advantage of increased
life
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 quality. In conclusion,
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 some
people
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 opt to
work
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 for the same company during their lives, not compromising their
life
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 stability over the excitement of a change, I am a vehement supporter that changing jobs might promote an increased balance between realisation and financial return, which is far more desirable.
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