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More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. What are the reasons for this movement? Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city.

#people #cities #search #life #city #movement #difficulties
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In the
last
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 few years we have seen a
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people
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 moving from rural areas to big
cities
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 searching for a better
life
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;
however
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, adapting to
city
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life
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 can be very difficult and stressful. In
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 I will try to find out why
people
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 decide to change and the difficulties related to
city
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life
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. In
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 ,world
people
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's needs are changing very fast. Finding a job in small towns is becoming very difficult for young adults, so they are forced to move to big
cities
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, where usually big companies
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 as Microsoft or Google have their headquarters, trying to apply for a place.
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, in big ,
cities
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 you can get to know a
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 of new
people
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, with different cultures and knowledge, and
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 may impact your way of seeing
life
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;
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 aspect reminds me of one of my closest friends, who is from Germany, that during
last
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 year helped me see the world through different eyes.
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, new movers can find some difficulties like finding a place to stay; in fact, renting a house in a metropolis can be very expensive and very hard to find with no references,
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 in Milan you can hardly find a house for less than seven hundred euros.
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, youngsters that are used to a rural mentality can be a little stunned by what a large
city
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 can offer in terms of the rhythm of
life
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. In conclusion, I think moving to
cities
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 can be a good thing only if you have some references or if you already know someone in the
city
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 that can help you with a job or an apartment,
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otherwise
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 you will struggle a
lot
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 facing a
lot
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 of difficulties as the rent or getting used to
city
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