In many countries, a financial crime involving identity theft is increasing. What are the causes of this trend, and what effects does it identity theft has on the victims involved?
Recently identity theft has become much more prevalent around the globe.
This
essay will firstly
argue the principal root of this
trend, social platforms and secondly
, contend that emotional stress is bound to be the major effect.
From a personal standpoint, the Internet community is a great platform for connecting with people, building relationships, sharing ideas and expanding businesses. Despite these great benefits, it is also
a fertile ground for cyber criminals who are searching for unsuspecting victims. The prevalence of the usage of social networking websites in today’s digital age has also
attracted internet fraudsters to set up multiple social media accounts and join many social media platforms so as to increase their chance of reaching their targets. In other words
, Malicious software and sites that look legitimate can easily be shared over social websites with as many people as possible within a very short time. For example
, According to
the Bromium report, nearly 1 out of 5 organisations worldwide are now infected by malware that is
shared through social media.
It is my contention that identity theft can be a difficult and bitter pill to swallow. sufferers may undergo various emotions such
as shock, anger, fear, shame, and anxiety. These emotions may harm a victim’s mental health and relationships with loved ones. In addition
, emotional stress can also
affect one’s physical health. sacrifices also
have trouble sleeping and symptoms such
as body aches, heart palpitations, and sweating.
In conclusion, this
kind of crime could have a deleterious impact on the community. some measures such
as spreading awareness about cyber security, using Antivirus and not clicking on unknown links are all important.Submitted by mehrdad.ghani
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Task Achievement
Ensure to address directly both causes and effects as per the question. Your explanation of the cause—social platforms—is well-articulated. Expanding on multiple causes could enhance completeness.
Task Achievement
Integrating a wider range of relevant examples across the essay could enhance the argument's depth and the clarity of your ideas.
Coherence & Cohesion
Maintain the engagement of your arguments with a more varied sentence structure and punctuation to enhance reading flow.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider revisiting paragraphing for balanced development of ideas. Each core idea (cause and effect) can benefit from its own paragraph to maintain logical progression.
General
Be cautious with the use of synonyms to avoid semantic errors. For example, 'sacrifices' might be intended as 'victims'. Precise language contributes to clearer expression of ideas.
General
Engagement with the topic is strong, demonstrating a good understanding of the issue of identity theft.
Use of Examples
Good use of specific example from the Bromium report to support your argument.
Structure
There's a clear introduction and conclusion that bookend the essay effectively, presenting your stance and summarizing the key points.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic
Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.
You essay structure should look something like this:
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – Problems
- Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- One of the first problems of the...
- Another problem that needs to be considered...
- A possible solution to this problem would be...
- One immediate practical solution is to...
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