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Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #art #children #school #waste #time
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School is
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 place of learning. Different
subjects
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 are being taught in
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schools nowadays. These
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 range from Science, Maths to
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extracurriculars
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 like Dance, Painting and many more.
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 is a debatable topic that some people consider
art
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subject
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 is of no use
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 other think it is of utmost importance for the children. In
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 essay, I will discuss both views
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this
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 statement and
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the conclusion
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at the end
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. On the
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 hand,
Art
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subject
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 is invaluable because it brings
creativity
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of
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 children. They show their hidden talent by learning
arts
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the arts
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. It enhances motor skills, coordination and perseverance. Youngsters vent out their stress
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 the major
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 by giving their time to arts like music, dance,
painting
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and painting
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. They get refreshed and more capable of learning and concentrating on the major
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.
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, some
students
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 develop their interest in these arts
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 and
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 motivated to choose them as their career which makes them earn their livelihood in future. They get away from the rat race of becoming
doctor
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doctors
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, engineer which has cut-throat competition and becomes successful in other fields. Contrary to
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, some
students
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 do not have any interest in these
art
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subjects
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. They just want to prioritize the major
subjects
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. They want to explore more in their mains. For them,
art
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 classes are of devoid any use. They have to attend these classes forcefully which is not suitable for them.
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 to
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, sometimes
students
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 lack their focus on the main
subjects
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 as they give more importance to
art
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subject
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.
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 adversely
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 their marks and they could not get passed in their final exams. These major
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 are
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 significant for them to pursue any
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 higher studies.
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, I think
art
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subject
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 should not be made compulsory for all
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students
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. It should be an optional one so that if the student has an interest , he or she can opt for it.
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