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The following show the main source of rubbish collected during a public clean-up day in one city and the main sources of rubbish collected from three locations within that city.

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Cleaning up
rubbish
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 in
one
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 city shows many kinds of
rubbish
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. As we can see in the pie chart, there are 6 different types of
rubbish
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.
The
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Cigarette
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cigarette
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butts
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 dominate with a
percentage
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40
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of 40
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%. Not only are the
cigarette
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butts
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,
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but,
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the plastic bottles
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 dominate the chart right after the
cigarette
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butts
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 of course. Its
percentage
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 is 21%, almost
a
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apply
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half of the
cigarette
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butts
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.
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,
aluminum
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aluminium
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 cans got 12% and followed by
the
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apply
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glass with a
percentage
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10
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of 10
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%. Other than that, drinking straws got the lowest
percentage
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 with only 8%. Less than any other
collected-
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collected rubbish
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rubbish
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.
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, other types of
rubbish
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 that cannot be mentioned
one
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 by
one
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 –and are classified as “other” got 9%.
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, we
also
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 can notice the table. That picture summarizes the
weight
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 (in
kilogram
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) of
collected-
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collected rubbish
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rubbish
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 during a public clean-up day in
one
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 city. In Arden Park, the total
weight
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 of the top three items is 66
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kilogram
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kilograms
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. That 66
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kilogram
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kilograms
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include
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includes
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 glass (33
kg
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),
aluminum
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aluminium
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 cans (24
kg
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),
as well as
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cigarette
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butts
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 (9). Another fantastic total
weight
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 is in Diego Beach,
it
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which
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 is up to 803
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kilogram
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kilograms
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. Most in any other location. It contains tyres (563
kg
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),
cigarette
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butts
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 (161
kg
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), and plastic bottles (69
kg
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). The
last
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, in Memorial Park,
cigarette
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butts
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 have 214
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kilogram
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kilograms
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, plastic bottles 108
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kilogram
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kilograms
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, and
aluminum
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aluminium
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 cans 66
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kilogram
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kilograms
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. The total
weight
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 of those three items is 378. All in all,
the
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apply
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rubbish
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 should
collected
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be collected
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 regularly by some people in any city around the world.
Moreover
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, the
percentage
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 of some college students was 4.2, almost twofold bigger than undergraduate degrees, 2.5%.
However
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, the college degree graduates’ wages were higher than some college people, $1,100 and $675 per week respectively.
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