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Some people prefer to work for themselves or own a business. Others prefer to work for an employer. Would you rather be self-employed, work for someone else, or own a business? Use specific reasons to explain your choice.

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People
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 have different concerns when they decide on ideal employment as it is once in a lifetime decision.In the contemporary world,it is mandatory to achieve financial stability to ensure a better future,
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 has to make a better choice in the very beginning ,whether to be an
employee
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, employer of a business or to be self-employed.There are different positive and negative aspects of each category, but in my point of view,being an
employee
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 under top management is the best option as it paves the pathway to a contented ,stable and relaxed lifestyle.
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,permanent
employees
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 are eligible to have a stable monthly income depending on their position and it allows them to be more financially competent than others who manage their own businesses.
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, government servants earn a salary
at the end
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 of each month
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 self-employed ones' income fluctuates over time. The success of the
people
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 who run their own businesses is unpredictable, even though there are billionaires reported worldwide.
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 ,
employees
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 can climb the ladder up to the executive level with close supervision and master their abilities under experts.
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, the capital investment needed in operating a company is a large amount of money, which needs loans from banks and paying those interest will be cumbersome for a single person.
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 being an
employee
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 is taken as a dependent state,they have fewer responsibilities, as strategies, and investments are handled by the employer, which creates a breathing space for
employees
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. In conclusion, there is no argument that the world requires employers
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employees
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, but my personal perception is being an
employee
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 brings serenity, stability and peace of mind to
people
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 as they have stable incomes and fewer responsibilities compared to
people
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 who prefer to work by themselves.
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