Overpopulation in many major urban centers around the world is a major problem. What are the causes of this? How can this problem be solved?

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recent years, major cities have seen an influx of people from
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rural areas. Recent studies of 2021
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a better life, year-on-year people
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their dwellings and relocate to major cities across India. It is crucial to understand why
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inflow is the economic and infrastructure in-balance between the urban and rural
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underdeveloped areas it has a direct impact on
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livelihood.
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income. The study highlights, since 2001, every year there is a 53% surge
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population in Bombay, India.
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care system and
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cost of living. In the wake to control
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exponential inflow in metropolitan like Bombay, the Maharashtra state government needs to act immediately. The local authorities need to encourage, major
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mega factories in
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rural areas and incentivise them by allocating grants.
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a source of livelihood, but
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transition will aid infrastructures like healthcare, telecommunication and other
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business to flourish.
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, there are other various factors contributing to the issue. But, I believe, it needs to start somewhere. By implementing these measures the current issue can be addressed and can avoid
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Migration
  • Sustainable development
  • Infrastructure
  • Population density
  • Urban sprawl
  • Urban planning
  • Renewable energy
  • Family planning
  • Rural economies
  • Public transport
  • Living standards
  • Healthcare access
  • Educational facilities
  • Employment opportunities
  • Regulations
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