The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

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The bar chart compares the amount of

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for

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who come from China, America, Turkey, and Brazil to do activities on holiday in Greece in August 2019. The activities include going to the beach, reading

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, and visiting places.

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spent the most

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reading

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they spent the least

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visiting places. There are most of the

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reading

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by Chinese people per day.

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, Brazilian spent the longest

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at the beach for 6

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per day. Chinese

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spend 8

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reading

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Americans only spend 5

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, both Turkish and Brazilian

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only take 5

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to read. 3

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spend on visiting attractions for American and Turkish

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whereas

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people from Brazil and China only spend 2

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and 1 hour on

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kind of activity respectively. Brazilians spend 6

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at the beach.

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that Chinese

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is half of it. Turkish and American spend 5

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and 4

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respectively.

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