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In spite of technological developments in transportation, many people believe that a bicycle is the best way to reach any destination within the city. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using a bicycle nowadays?

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It is considered by some
people
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tend
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 to
use
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 bicycles as better convenient to do inner
city
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 tasks. There are some merits and demerits to using the
bicycle
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 in the
city
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.
this
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 the positive sides of using a
bicycle
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 within the
city
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 could be considered as to saving fuel , avoiding the heavy
city
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traffic
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as well as
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 beneficial to the health. To elaborate, There are cycle paths have been developed in many cities.
people
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 can
use
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 these paths and can avoid the
traffic
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 by using a
bicycle
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 which can be healthier for them and could save a fraction of money on fuel which contributes to saving the environment and help to reduce the
traffic
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 noise.
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, a survey conducted in Berlin by the German government found that 65% of berlin resident lean to
use
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 a
bicycle
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 to do domestic duties which assist them to have exercise and saving time and cost of health clubs.
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, there are multifarious advantages for those
people
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 who
use
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 a
bicycle
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 for their small jobs. Shifting towards the negative side of
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 trend that
people
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 could meet an accident in heavy
traffic
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 by crossing the road even though using a full harness system. which could be dangerous for a person's life. To explain , individuals might need to carry full safety harnesses before using the
bicycle
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 in the local
city
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 to reach their destinations which still could be harmful if they are hit by any high-speed vehicle.
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, individuals need to carry all the safety equipment with them and they are usually not any
facility
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 to lock
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 equipment and can go to any market.
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, as per the news published by Europe BBC ( British Broadcasting Corporation) revealed that 42% of road accidents happened
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bicycle
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 riders in 2009 and most of the cycle riders could not survive after accidents.
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, using bicycles in the
city
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 could lead to some drawbacks. In conclusion,
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 there are some disadvantages of using bicycles within the
city
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 for local domestic jobs,
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 as the risk of accidents and carrying out heavy safety items, there are many advantages which are best for health , saving fossil fuels and chip in to save the environment.

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