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Course and general online study have recently become very popular. However, some people still prefer to attend classes in person. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Of recent, online courses and general studies have become very common.
Although
 some
people
 still choose to attend
classes
 in
person
. Inasmuch as attending
classes
 in
person
 promotes physical interactions, I believe online learning is the best alternative.
To begin
 with, the introduction and advancement of technology in today's world has bought to play so many
things
, one of them being electronic learning. I believe online studies have many advantages.
Firstly
, there will be no need for one to move from home to school premises which makes it cheap as it cuts off transport costs.
Secondly
, with the introduction of zoom meeting spaces,it has made it possible for student and lecturer interactions, learners can raise their hands if they have any burning issues and the lecturer can be able to attend to them just like in
person
.
However
, I believe some
people
 prefer going for lessons in-
person
 to online because of the physical interactions. As the saying goes "What you hear, you will remember but what you see, you will never forget." Most lesson presenters become more active in
person
, they jump around making illustrations connected to what they are presenting
in contrast
, online lecturers are usually just sitting, it's mostly just talking and explaining.
Therefore
, in-
person
classes
 are best for
people
 with less ability to concentrate. A research conducted by a Japanese researcher on the cons and
prons
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pros
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 of online learning in comparison to in-
person
classes
,
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 reviewed that the advantages of electronic learning outweigh the other
one
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ones
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 by far.
Thus
 inclusive of expenditure on
things
such
 as accommodation and other
things
. Most
people
 who opt to attend in-
person
classes
 tend to relocate to learning institutions in most cases which is a plus in terms of expenses looking at food and other
things
 away from home.
On the other hand
, a
person
 attending class can be in class in the comfort of their home.
To sum up
, with the popularity of online courses and general studies nowadays. I believe it has brought more good than harm despite others still choosing in-
person
classes
.
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