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The increase in people's life expectancy means that they have will to work till older age to pay for their retirement. One alternative is that people start to work at a younger age. Is this alternative a positive or a negative development?

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Starting to work at a younger
age
 can have both positive and negative effects. On one hand, individuals who start working at a younger
age
 can accumulate more savings and financial stability in the long term. They
also
 gain more experience and skills that can help them in their future career.
On the other hand
, starting to work at a young
age
 can deprive individuals of the time and opportunities to pursue their education, travel or explore other options before committing to a career path. It can
also
 have negative effects on their mental and physical health, leading to burnout and exhaustion. Ultimately, the decision to start working at a young
age
 or later in life is a personal one, and it depends on an individual's circumstances, priorities, and goals. It is important to balance financial stability with personal well-being and
fulfillment
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