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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

#food #drink #products #levels #sugar #health #people
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The excessive amount of sugar in
food
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 and
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products
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 made by numerous manufacturers.
However
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, the reason is a lot of health diseases. Several experts said that
products
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 with cheap prices should be overpriced. I completely disagree with
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 argument and I will discuss it.
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 with, making
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 more expensive it's not a good solution.
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 to say, the number of people who still can buy and consume
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 and
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 harmful is increased.
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, the best way they can help themselves use
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 without sugar and eat organic
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.
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, when they eat and
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 healthy
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, they get sick less.
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 in turn has a positive impact on their body and different aspects of their personal life.
On the other hand
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 supporters of junk
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 believe that the benefits from them cannot be ignored.
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, another argument
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 the plan is that the more overpriced
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 will be affected by health issues
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 as the amount of purchase of junk
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 being decreased. To put it differently when the sell fast
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 fall, the level of many diseases is decreased. Take your waist,
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, people are less willing to buy these foods.
To sum up
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, I disagree with overpriced
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 and
drink
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 as soda and
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this
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 issue might need special experts.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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