Too much emphasis is placed on going to university for academic education. People should be incouraged to do vocational training, because there is a lack qualified tradespeople such as electricians or plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Higher
education
has become an integral requirement for school leavers’s
future jobs over the decades. Unluckily, Remove the s
leavers’
people
are biased towards academic education
than vocational traing
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training
while
they both take important roles in our life. From my perspective, I agree that we should encourage people
to choose vocational training for reasons.
Each profession has different educational requirements. For some
special industries namely medical, Change preposition
Some
contruction
, needs employees Correct your spelling
construction
to
have certain academic qualifications that the reason why university often takes longer than Fix the infinitive
apply
voccational
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vocational
traing
. Correct your spelling
training
trading
trying
However
, degrees are not essential for every jobs
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job
such
as stylist, interior organizer, Correct word choice
and electricians
electricians
, Fix the agreement mistake
electrician
theory
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and theory
are
not needed as Correct subject-verb agreement
is
practicalin
those cases, and vocational skills become the best choice for future Correct your spelling
practical in
practising
practical
workers
. If people
put vocational training and academic study
on a finance
scale, Replace the word
financial
it is clear that
vocational study
,
is Remove the comma
apply
lot
more Correct article usage
a lot
benefical
for Correct your spelling
beneficial
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a student
the student
student
than academic Fix the agreement mistake
students
education
. Particularly with some of the profession
like plumbers, electricians, Fix the agreement mistake
professions
builder
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builders
welder
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welders
factory
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and factory
worker
, … Fix the agreement mistake
workers
workers
can have many job oppertunities
after 6 months to a year Correct your spelling
opportunities
courses
. Change preposition
of courses
Furthermore
, Add an article
the market
market
lacks Change noun form
market's
of
qualified Remove the preposition
apply
workers
lead to emergency
situation Add an article
an emergency
can
not be Correct pronoun usage
that can
controled
. Correct your spelling
controlled
Eventualy
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Eventually
citizens
life becomes Change noun form
citizens'
citizen's
inconvienient
and Correct your spelling
inconvenient
other
consequences. One of the biggest Add a missing verb
have other
reason
why Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
people
don’t choose vocational training , because
of the stereotype that qualified Add a missing verb
is because
trade
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tradespeople
people
might not have high
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a high
salary
as Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
white-colar
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white-collar
workers
. In fact, not all employees, who studied with academic education
have better income compare
with Wrong verb form
compared
people
graduated
with vocational skills. Correct pronoun usage
who graduated
For example
, a coder who just need
four to six month to Change the verb form
needs
study
and practise at bootcamp
can easily apply for a big technology. Correct your spelling
boot camp
Meanwhile
language students often feel Add a comma
,Meanwhile
that is
really hard to find a good change
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chance
with
their major. With Change preposition
in
competitive
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a competitive
enviroment
and lack of job offers, it seems like languages are not suitable for everyone.
In Correct your spelling
environment
concusion
, vocational training is an option Correct your spelling
conclusion
should
be considered by leavers. With Correct pronoun usage
that should
affordable
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the affordable
expense
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expenses
short term
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short-term
study
, this
form of education
is a great selection for future
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a future
employee
.Fix the agreement mistake
employees
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