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Frequency of eating at fast food restaurants among people in the USA (2003-2013).

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The number of people who
eating
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eat
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 out at fast
food
reastaurants
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restaurants
 in the USA between 2003 and 2013 years. They diverged
six
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into six
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gruops
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groups
, depending on how quickly eats in the fast
food
 cafes. The number of residents who eat at
fast-
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fast-food
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food
 restaurants once a week and twice or once a month represented always high results . But , the amount of
population
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the population
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 who every day or never go for to eat junk
food
 saw
minimum
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a minimum
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 percentage whole period. The number of humans every day or never eating at fast
food
 restaurants show almost 5 per cent
in
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at
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 the beginning of the period but ,
this
 results decrease slightly and did not change next
years
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year
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 The
amont
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amount
 of habitations which go to eating out several times a week or a few times a year moderate percentage whole period between 13 % to 20% . USA population which
eat
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eats
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 at restaurants once a week increased in
2006
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the 2006
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 year from 31 per cent to 33 per cent , but it show a slight decrease in 2013 .
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