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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money adressing the problems of public. To what extent do you agree?

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Many people argue that the
government
 is spending much
money
 to find life on other planets,
while
 where the
government
 should prioritize civil
issues
. I believe
that is
 correct because
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seriouser
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 humanitarian
issues
, and that could result in a country
cost
gap
. The
government
 spending a lot of
money
 to repair
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the problem
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problem
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problems
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 of
public
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 more important than
it
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 use
for
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 exploring other planets.
That is
 because,
the
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community
issues
 in earth life affect the survival of all beings since the age of the earth is increasing can
will
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add to the problem of some disasters, so if the
society
hit
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 by a disaster can cause extinction.
For example
, the occurrence of
the
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poverty in India has increased
as a result
 of the
government
 not allocating
money
 to fix the problem of
the
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society
, and the environment be
unstable
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 consequence of the
issues
such
 as
the
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society
pollute
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 the aquatic environment where they are not controlled.
Additionally
, the
government
 waste a lot of
money
 for finding new life on other planets which could result in a country
cost
gap
.
That is
 to say, the
government
 must use
much
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money
 for buying some facilities which
has
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 a
big-budget
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, and they should spend
much
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 funds which
increases
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 the
cost
 of
living
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the living
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gap
, and it can make solving public problems that are not evenly distributed.
For instance
, the
government
 in the USA
spending
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 a lot of
money
 to build a space station as much as 100 billion, so it
make
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 the savings of state finances reduced by 45%, and the needs of
society
be
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unfulfilled.
To conclude
, the
government
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 the funds of
country
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the country
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 to complete public problems which can survive longer, and they must avoid the
cost
gap
. Where possible, the
government
 should balance the
money
 between the main needs of
society
 and secondary
need
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.
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