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Some people believe that all children should have a pet or an animal to look after. Other people disagree, however, saying that this depends on a child’s circumstances. Consider these opposing views, and give your own opinion.

#people #children #pet #child’s #circumstances
In the current generation, most people like to have a variety of
pets
 in their homes.Especially,
children
 fond of their pet animals and they will spend most of their time with their
pets
 some people avoid having a pet in the house.It is not necessary to grow
pets
 in their home and
this
 is fully based on their needs and desire.Let us discuss
about
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these both views and my opinion in that essay. Nowadays, In the markets have a variety of
pets
 so most
children
 tend to buy their like one and it will create happiness .Particularly, kids are always fond of their
pets
 and
this
 will help to grow their caring ability and responsibility dogs and cats play a huge role in
child's
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a child's
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 mental development.
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,in the house having cats or
dog
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dogs
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will help
to
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together and it will reduce the digital gadgets accessibility and walking,feeding and other chores which are helping to develop good beings.
On the other hand
,
maintenance
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 cost of domestic animals it's high because we have to put
vaccines
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in vaccines
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 every month and need to take care of quality foods so these all
impacts
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 the financial stability of middle-class people.Sometimes dog and cat hair lead to cough and allergy in toddlers and we have to give some training to handle difficult situations
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for
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their kids .
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 , if
children
 have longtime coughs and lung infections doctors advise
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them to
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to avoid
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 playing with dogs. In my opinion, most
children
 in the cities growing alone so
pets
 will help to reduce their loneliness and partner the games.Notably,
children
 raised with their
pets
 have more responsibility compared with others.
To sum up
, With the current living environment
pets
 help us to live a happy life and it will increase our expenses .
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