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Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion

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Nowadays, a number of people think that schools should select
students
according to
 their academic
abilities
,
another
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while another
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 portion of people believe that it is best to have
students
 with different
abilities
 studying together.
This
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In this
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 essay I will discuss both points of view. On the one hand, the advantage of choosing
students
according to
 their academic
abilities
 is that
to
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it
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 advance schools’ level. It can be a contributing factor to
develop
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developing
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 curriculum and
teach
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teaching
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diversity
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a diversity
the diversity
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 of
students
. Teacher makes the teaching materials
according to
 their academic interests.
For example
, Sam and Mary are good at biology and stay in the same class. Their teacher always provides anatomy activities to them
such
 as
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the anatomy
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 of the cow eye.
Thus
, choosing
students
 with good academic
abilities
 could help the school get a better ranking.
On the other hand
, some people believe that schools should choose
students
 with different
abilities
. Teachers have a great influence on
students
.
According to
 the
student
's different
abilities
, the teacher teaches them in a simple way
that is
 more suitable for them. It matches the
student
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student's
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 study level.
For example
,
Peter
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Peter's
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 exam result was the
last
 one in the academic class.
However
, he changed to different
abilities
, his result had been
improve
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improving
improved
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. Because he could understand the lesson material after he changed the class.
Thus
,
students
 studying with different
abilities
is
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are
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 suitable for
student
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the student
a student
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. In conclusion, there
some
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are some
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 benefits of
select
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selecting
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students
according to
 their academic
abilities
 or different
abilities
 which
is
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are
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 fit for different
students
. I agreed that
student
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students
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 with different
abilities
 studying together
which
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apply
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is the best because of
students’
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the students’
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level
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levels
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.
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