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The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information ba selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows four countries of residence pf overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information ba selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant
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The chart shows the development trends of international
students
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 studying in Australia from four Asian
countries
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.
Overall
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 18 years, from 1982 to 2000, the sum of overseas
students
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 increased by the year. But the increase is not the same in Malaysia, Indonesia, Hong Kong, and Singapore. Looking at the details. From 1982 to 1990, the largest proportion of Australian
students
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 in the four
countries
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 is Malaysia. Since 1990, the situation has changed. First rapidly growing Hong Kong overtook Malaysia and maintained first place over 3 years,
then
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 Indonesia caught up and maintained the largest number until 2000. Singapore maintained steady growth in the number of international
students
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 between 1982 and 2000.
In contrast
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, from 1997 to 2000, the other three
countries
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 had an obvious decline and
then
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 rebounded. In 2000, the total number of international
students
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 from the four
countries
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 is around 20k. It is about double 10 years ago.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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