Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to study for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In the recent years, some of the university students believe that they need to learn other subjects parallel to their own course. Whilst, some of the students argue that they should only concentrate on only one branch to qualify themselves. In

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stating my own view. Looking at the first group, being professional in three or four subjects is necessary in

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era. What I mean, is you need to

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and know different things to cope with every situation.

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, thousands of people in Iran go to university to

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graduate with a degree in engineering and work with their knowledge. If these guys

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know some economic lessons, they can invest their salary and make more money. By increasing their wages, they can easily achieve their dreams.

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, some of the students claim that they should only study what the university presents. Generally, they think if they only focus on one topic, they will be more successful in their career. Take medical doctors as an example. If a doctor

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most of his or her time during the day, he or she can diagnose more accurately during their work life. All things considered, nowadays companies and organisations need qualified workers to provide better services to society. In my opinion,

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companies employ

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who are more

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in their job, people who have learned other topics as well, can be more successful in their lives.

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Work on improving sentence structure and avoiding minor grammatical mistakes for increased clarity.

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Ensure that all viewpoints presented are equally developed. The discussion on medical doctors is a bit brief.

Coherence and Cohesion

Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a good frame for your argument.

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You provide a balanced discussion of both views, showing a good understanding of the topic.

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The example about Iranian students and economic lessons effectively supports your argument.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

255 words

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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to study for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large, extended family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?

You Are due to give a talk to you through about the danger of smoking, but you cannot now do so. Write a letter to the youth group leader, explain that you cannot come. Apologise for your absence. Suggest a new occasion.

You recently read an article in the newspaper about someone whom you know personally but have not heard from in a long time. You found that some of the information published was incorrect.