Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, youngsters are increasingly using technological gadgets more frequently and over a long period. I opine
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trend has both pros and cons that affect the early development of human beings.
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suggestions for future generations. On the one hand, digital gadgets have many beneficial effects, not only for adults' private and public businesses, but
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educational development of kids. Most
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information is easily accessed with only a few touches via smartphones so children can use their abundant time to learn about their favourite issues or follow their dream at a very early age.
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is evidenced by a growing number of young hot accouters from TikTok, a digital social platform for users to post short videos.
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, kids can make thousands of dollars via a few trending videos.
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, the positive effects would only appear only if its
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put under the supervision of adults.
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, hours of using smartphones would be detrimental to health, especially children. They could easily have vision diseases, particularly short sight at very early ages.
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, phone addiction is one of the common issues that prevent kids from outdoor activities. As
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matter of fact, parental generations often complain about how different the entertainment activities
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their time and now.
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, social media and
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contain lots of toxic information.
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could affect children's mental health and their behaviours
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their lack of necessary life skills.
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, dark webs, a kind of website containing extremely harmful content, are an increasing emersion in their number
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their toxic level. In conclusion, allowing youngsters to use electrical devices
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more harm than good. In my opinion, the frequency of smartphone usage must be set under the appropriate amount of time and adult supervision.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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