Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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On the one hand, digital gadgets have many beneficial effects, not only for adults' private and public businesses, but Linking Words
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information is easily accessed with only a few touches via smartphones so children can use their abundant time to learn about their favourite issues or follow their dream at a very early age. Correct article usage
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, hours of using smartphones would be detrimental to health, especially children. They could easily have vision diseases, particularly short sight at very early ages. Linking Words
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more harm than good. In my opinion, the frequency of smartphone usage must be set under the appropriate amount of time and adult supervision.Fix the infinitive
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