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Some people tink that traditional education is better than online education.To what extent do you agree or dissagree?

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It is believed that traditional
education
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 has more advantages than online
education
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. I disagree with
this
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 opinion and think that online
education
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 is far
more
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superior ,
more
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and more
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 advanced than traditional
education
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 and has more to offer.
Firstly
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,online
education
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 is easily accessible
for
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to
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 everyone and offers
variety
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a variety
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 of courses that meets the needs of
majority
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the majority
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 of
students
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.Local colleges and universities are often limited to certain courses. Many
students
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 still live
in
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with
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 their families in commuter towns and villages away from major cities and towns where most of the educational
centers
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 are located .Online courses enable
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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 to live in one place and graduate from
university
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universities
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 and colleges worldwide.
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a student
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student
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students
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 can live and
work
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 in Ireland and take up a
couse
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course
in
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at
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 Cambridge
univesity
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university
 in
UK
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the UK
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. Many
students
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 combine studying with
work
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 to pay
their
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for their accommodation, food and clothes, many of them during the day ,
some
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and some
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 of them
work
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 in the evenings. Online
education
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centers
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centres
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 provide flexible
self -ace
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self-ace
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 programs which are very
convinient
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convenient
 for
students
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 who
work
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.
Although
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 online
education
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 has many advantages, it
also
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 has some drawbacks too. Traditional
education
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 involves attending classes where
students
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 interact with one another and with
teacher
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the teacher
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.
This
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 helps them to develop a sense of teamwork and improve their communication skills .Those skills can be very
helpfull
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helpful
 when they decide to pursue their
carriers
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careers
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.
Students
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 who self-study at
homeoften
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home often
luck
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lack
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 those skills.
To conclude
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,
although
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 there is a belief that traditional
education
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 is better, there are other important factors to consider
such
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 as
needs
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the needs
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every
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of every
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 student and their
preferenes
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preferences
 In my opinion, online
education
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 can meet
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the umajoity
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umajoity
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majority
 of
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students
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students'
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neeeds
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needs
 and is better than traditional
education
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 .

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