Some children spend hours everyday on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Nowadays, most
children
are busy playing video games on their smart devices. Use synonyms
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essay focuses on the reasons for Linking Words
this
particular behaviour and how it affects the child's Linking Words
both
mental and physical condition in a negative way.
The first reason that came to mind, is that the new technology is not only accessible but Correct pronoun usage
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also
easy to understand and work with. So comparing working or studying with playing video games or surfing the net, Linking Words
it is clear that
there is no need for concentration or hard work when you are using technology. Linking Words
In other words
, everyone enjoys working with their smartphones because it does not take a lot of energy, especially when we are talking about Linking Words
children
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Furthermore
, in comparison to playing a sport or playing an Xbox game, the Xbox game is definitely much more interesting than engaging in physical activity.
Personally, I believe that these new devices have had a bad influence on our Linking Words
children
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due to
the following reasons. Linking Words
Firstly
, it is a time-consuming activity, Linking Words
for instance
, people do not notice the passing of minutes when they are surfing the net, so basically it is a waste of time. Linking Words
Secondly
, in that case, they will not go around hanging out with their friends as they used to before, so they will become anti-social teenagers in the future. Linking Words
In other words
, they will be lacking social skills. Linking Words
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, not only it Linking Words
harms
their mental health, as mentioned earlier, Wrong verb form
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but it
harmful
to their body, Rephrase
also harmful
for instance
, some experts claim that staring at the smart device's screen for long hours is damaging to the eyes. Linking Words
In addition
, it may result in insomnia. Linking Words
Lastly
, if it has a negative impact on Linking Words
children
, it means that it is bad for society because in that ,case the future society will fail Use synonyms
due to
its irresponsible, lazy and unhealthy citizens.
In conclusion, most Linking Words
children
spend hours on their smartphones Use synonyms
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due to
several reasons. I am totally convinced that Change preposition
for
this
is a negative development so the amount of time they use their phones should be limited by parents or guardians.Linking Words
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