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Our climate is changing due to humans activity . Apart from government measures what should be done in this regard ?

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At present time, our climate is changing very frequently ,for which , and different types of disasters are occurring.
Hence
, the situation of the
environment
 has become a concern in all countries.
This
 essay believes that apart from
government
 measures and policies , individuals should come forward in
this
 regard. Human beings are one of the main reasons why our climate is changing . We are involved in different types of harmful activity which tend to change the climate. Apart from
government
 measures , individuals should take some measures to stop degrading the
environment
.
Firstly
, industries should not be built within society and the smoke which comes out from industries should be controlled .
Furthermore
 , vehicles which emit black smoke should be banned.
Secondly
 , deforestation should be stopped. We know, trees play an important role in absorbing carbon dioxide. If we cut down trees at an indiscriminate rate , our world will turn into a great desert.
Lastly
, we should not throw our
wastages
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 into the river or canals. Public toilets and dustbins should be installed in certain areas.
For example
, in our ,country most people throw their household wattages into rivers or canals , which eventually pollutes the water. If public toilets or dustbins are installed, the water will not be polluted any more.
Moreover
, the
government
 should organise seminars, rallies and TV programmes in order to awaken the general people. People should be made aware of the harmful effects of their activities on our
environment
.
Besides
, different types of laws should be implemented in order to save the
environment
.
For example
, individuals should be punished if they try to harm our
environment
. All in all , the only
government
 will not be able to save the
environment
 if we do not come forward. That's why
,
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we should change our lifestyle and certain habits in order to save our
environment
otherwise
 we will be on the verge of extinction .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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