The graph below shows how money was spent on differentforms of entertainment.

The graph below shows how money was spent on differentforms of entertainment.
The bar chart illustrates that people who lived in Asia, Europe, United States spent money on cinema, video, music, publishing and television over five years period.
Overall
, it is obviously clear that the US citizens spent more money on joyful activities in both years
while
more budget was allocated to publishing
while
Asian people had less entertainment than others during the period.
To begin
with, 257
billion
dollars
had been spent for enjoying life by US individuals including more than 100
billion
dollars
for publishing and 100
billion
dollars
for television in 2000. Not only in 2000 but
also
in 1995 they allocated money around 184
billion
dollars
for entertainment when compared to the other two nations.
Furthermore
, in 1995 Asian society's 67
billion
dollars
; two times lower than the US budget in 1995, was dedicated to all five forms of entertainment and it was approximately doubled in 2000,
whereas
it was two times lower than the US. In Europe, 97
billion
dollars
and 131
billion
dollars
were spent on those activities in 1995 and 2000 respectively.
However
, all nations were more likely to watch television and publish at given times
in contrast
to other forms.
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