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Every year several language die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer language in the world. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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With the passing of ,time our society has become more international. because of
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 ,progress several traditional
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 as dialects are dismissed every year. It's thought that
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 transition is not important because life becomes easier without too many
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 topic marking that our cultural roots are what distinguishes us from other countries.
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, I have to say that, nowadays, everyone speaks at least two
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 including English, so we have become more international, but, was
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? We have lost dialects that were important because they helped us keep in touch with our motherland and with its cultural roots and traditions;
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, Italian dialects are slowly vanishing in those parts of the country that have more contact with other nations
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 as Milan or Venice.
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, being international is a very good thing. In fact, we are influenced by, not only our nation's culture but
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 other cultures and traditions that help us to be less narrow-minded and more open to different visions of the world.
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, having only a few
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 makes communication between two foreigners easier, for ,
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 an Italian and a Turkish can talk to each other with no problem with the use of English which is worldwide known. To summarise, I do not completely agree with the idea of fewer
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 make life easier, because, even if it's actually easier to communicate with others, there are some cultural aspects that get lost if we do not speak our home-grown language. In my ,opinion we should mix both aspects the traditional and the international one so we can be enriched as a person.
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