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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Receiving an
education
 is an important life experience for every child, and
parents
 want to give their
children
 the best
education
. Today, some
parents
 believe that teaching
children
 at
home
 is best for a child's development,
while
 others think that it is important for
children
 to go to
school
.
This
 essay will discuss both views and give my own opinion. As someone educated in China, I can understand why some
parents
 think that teaching
children
 at
home
 is good.
For example
, in China, students don't just study together, they compete with each other. "Good students" need to study very hard for their grades. If their grades are not good, they will face tremendous pressure from teachers, classmates, and even
parents
. Because of the environment, everyone will compare subconsciously.
This
 pressure and over-competition are good for
children
's development? I don't think so. That's why I understand
parents
 who want to homeschool. But
on the other hand
, teaching at
home
 requires
parents
 to spend more time and effort to achieve the same growth as schools. Many
parents
 fall short of
this
 standard. Inadequate
education
 will waste
children
's most important time in vain.
In addition
, at
school
,
children
 can meet many peers, which helps build their social skills. Despite its shortcomings, studying at
school
 is a good default choice. In conclusion, teaching
children
 at
home
 is a good choice for some
children
 and
parents
, but it's not for everyone, it's a test of
parents
' time and educational ability.
Education
 in
school
 remains a good default choice.
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