Some people think that advertisements are good for the society whereas others oppose this view. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, it is undoubtedly true that human
life
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has been much affected by
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. Many
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hold a strong belief that
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are good for society but others believe that advertisements will badly affect human
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. Regarding that, both notions
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opinion will be explained in
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essay. On the one hand, there is a benefit of
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for society
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as giving more
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. Ubiquitously appeared by some vendors,
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will offer various products for consumers and
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can opt
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for
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the best goods to fulfill their needs.
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,
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also
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take a main role in local economic stability. paying taxes to a country,
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may contribute to
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economics in countries.
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, there are
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some drawbacks
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to
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having a lot of
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in our societies
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as
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interfering
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life
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. because of its rampant existence,
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may disturb
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people
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activity. To illustrate, so
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options may lead
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to become more consumptive
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buying more tertiary goods. Another main reason why
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disturb
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life
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is not appropriate for a certain group of age.
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, in some
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countries
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country
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country,
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there are a lot of cigarette
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, that
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not relevant for some
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groups
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of age like children.
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condition may trigger children to try
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cigarettes
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.
thus
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,
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by a plethora of
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may
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bring
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negative
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a negative
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impact
to
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some
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. In conclusion, having many
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in society might be positive because it can help
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to
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choose the most featured product and contribute to the countries’ taxes.
However
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, the negative effect is
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harmful,
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as triggering
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to live more consumptive and children to consume
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products
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that they should not consume.
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