The pursuit of wealth has become the main motivation for many business owners nowadays. Do you thinks this is a positive or negative development ?

Nowadays, becoming rich is the dream of numerous people. It is
also
the main purpose for humans who own
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enterprise.In my opinion,
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think it may have negative impacts on
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development. On the one hand, they can contribute to the
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economic
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of their country and create jobs for others.
Due to
the fact that the people who own a company always want to maximize their profits with
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little cost,
therefore
they need to improve worker productivity and decrease redundant parts of
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.
Furthermore
, when their company wants to extend their business size,
owner
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the owner
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has to recruit more
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,
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lead
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to
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the declines
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declines
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unemployment rate in their country.
For example
, Viettel is a well-known group in Vietnam,
this
group not only has significantly
contribute
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around 1 billion dollars per
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year to
Vietnam
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the Vietnam
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government's budget
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but
also
creates about 100000
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for Vietnamese.
Nevertheless
, if their main purpose
is only earn
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is only to earn
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money as much as they can,
this
motivation causes plenty
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harmful issues
such
as unfair competition or financial cheating.
To begin
with, unfair competition may help owner earns more profits without tax or responsibility for their products.
As a result
, good companies can not grow,
goverment
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government
governments
deal with budget shortage
hence
they do not have enough finance to invest
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projects.
For instance
,
FLC
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group is a good example
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this
issue, they steadily cheat on financial
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and
stock
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,
this
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action causes investors
do
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not
trust
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stock
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market and Vietnam's financial background.
To sum up
,
drawbacks
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of
this
motivation
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bigger than its positive. First of all, starting a business must follow commercial rules, after that they can think about
maximize
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benefits.
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