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Some people think that hosting an international sports eventsis a good for the country while some people think it's bad. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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The debate on whether it's good for a
country
 to host an international sports
event
 is good for a
country
 or not. I believe that there are numerous beneficial outcomes that could come from
such
 activities.
For instance
, economical
growths
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,
state of the art
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state-of-the-art
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 roads and
stadium
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stadiums
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.
On the other hand
, those who don't agree, believe that it will bring scrutiny from
bad
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 press which will overshadow the main
event
 and
Also
, redundant structures left behind after the main
event
. Hosting an international sporting
event
 could be beneficial for the hosting
country
.
Such
 as
,
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 economic growth
this
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could be achieved through increased revenue from tourism and in the hotel industry as there would be an influx of people coming into the
country
 to be part of the games,the hosting nation could use
this
 opportunity to sell it as a tourist destination to the spectators.
In addition
, the nation could benefit from building the latest infrastructure
such
 as roads and new stadiums.
This
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 facilities play an important role in allowing for easy accessibility to and from the venues for both the athletes and the spectators
consequently
, new stadiums built
allow
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 for different events to run smoothly without interruption.
For example
, during the
last
 world cup games held in Qatar, the hosting
country
 built numerous stadiums with the latest technology, which led to a successful
event
.
However
, hosting activities of
such
 magnitude could
also
 have negative outcomes
such
 as redundant structures left behind after the sporting
event
such
 structures are left to collect dust as they are no longer in use.
Also
, scrutiny that comes from
bad
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 press would
consequently
 overshadow the main
event
.
For instance
, during the 2018 world cup series held in Russia, the hosting
country
 came under fire from the international press
due to
it's
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 policies against the LGBTQ community. In conclusion, holding
world renowned
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 sports events in a
country
 could be a good thing but at the same
time
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 proper preparations and caution should be put in mind to avoid
the
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negative outcomes.
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