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Tourism has increased so much over the last 50 years that it is having a mainly negative impact on local habitants and the environment. However, others claim that it is good for the economy. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of tourism and give your own opinion.

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Tourism
 is the largest and fastest-growing industry in the world. It is the origin of revenue and employment. It
also
 gives an opportunity for
people
 to understand the culture, civilization, and religious aspects of the country. Some
people
 think that the rapidly growing of
tourism
 has a number of disadvantages.
However
, others think that it has more advantages than disadvantages. In my opinion,
tourism
 has more benefits than flaws. I am going to write about it in my essay. First of all, it is a source of revenue and
investments
. So many countries became strong and rich thanks to advanced
tourism
.
For example
, Dubai's economy was dependent on oil at the beginning of the 21st century. Nowadays,
this
 megapolis is known as the centre of UAE
tourism
. The tallest building, the biggest mall, and the largest aquarium in the world made
this
 place very convenient for
investments
. It is not news that Dubai is a huge and wealthy city. Now,
this
 city's economy is not dependent on natural resources.
Tourism
 made
this
 city very rich. Despite attracting new
investments
,
tourism
 is a big source of employment. Approximately 10 million
people
 have a job related to
tourism
. Because of the development of
this
 type of industry, a number of workplaces have been opened. From my point of view, it is already a big advantage for
people
 and for their country's economy.
To sum up
, there are a lot of benefits that exceed disadvantages. Big
investments
 and a number of employment make
this
 type of industry very valuable. Let's improve our
tourism
 and make our country better!
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Stimulating
  • Overdevelopment
  • Cultural exchange
  • Environmental degradation
  • Infrastructure
  • Commercialized
  • Conservation efforts
  • Eco-tourism
  • Seasonal fluctuations
  • Cost of living
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