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the pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year,2016.

the pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year,2016.
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This
 chart illustrates the information regarding the amount of
bill
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bills
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 that pupil's
charity
 located in the United States of America
Revenue
 sources and Expenditures in one year,2016.
Overall
,
it is clear that
donation
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the donation
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 is
bit
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a bit
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 higher than the expenses.
However
,
USA
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the USA
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 received lesser donated food rather than the expenditures of program services. It is evident from the pie chart that Community Contributions of donated food in
revenue
 sources was 10.4%.
Additionally
 donated food received by children's
charity
 of Program
Revenue
 was 2.2%.Weather Investment Income
as well as
 Government Grants donated 0.2%
in
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to
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 learner's
charity
.
Therefore
,Other Income was in
charity
 0.4% as
total
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a total
the total
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 number of
revenue
 sources
come
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comes
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around
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to around
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 $53,561,580 respectively.
On the other hand
 expenses of pupil
charity
 in
USA
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the USA
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 Fundraising expenditure
was
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were
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 2.6%.
However
,Management and General Expenditure expenses in the children's
charity
was
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were
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 1.6%
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, as well as the total number of expenditure in the children's charity,
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as well as
 the total
number of
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apply
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expenditure in the children's
charity
 was $53,224,896.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words charity, revenue with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising events
  • expenditure
  • administration costs
  • program expenses
  • direct benefits
  • indirect benefits
  • underprivileged children
  • education
  • healthcare
  • shelter
  • nourishment
  • medical treatments
  • basic needs
  • financial sustainability
  • transparency
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