the pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year,2016.
This
chart illustrates the information regarding the amount of Linking Words
bill
that pupil's Fix the agreement mistake
bills
charity
located in the United States of America Use synonyms
Revenue
sources and Expenditures in one year,2016.
Use synonyms
Overall
,Linking Words
it is clear that
Linking Words
donation
is Correct article usage
the donation
bit
higher than the expenses.Correct article usage
a bit
However
,Linking Words
USA
received lesser donated food rather than the expenditures of program services.
It is evident from the pie chart that Community Contributions of donated food in Correct article usage
the USA
revenue
sources was 10.4%.Use synonyms
Additionally
donated food received by children's Linking Words
charity
of Program Use synonyms
Revenue
was 2.2%.Weather Investment Income Use synonyms
as well as
Government Grants donated 0.2% Linking Words
in
learner's Change preposition
to
charity
.Use synonyms
Therefore
,Other Income was in Linking Words
charity
0.4% as Use synonyms
total
number of Change the article
a total
the total
revenue
sources Use synonyms
come
Correct subject-verb agreement
comes
around
$53,561,580 respectively.
Change preposition
to around
On the other hand
expenses of pupil Linking Words
charity
in Use synonyms
USA
Fundraising expenditure Correct article usage
the USA
was
2.6%.Correct subject-verb agreement
were
However
,Management and General Expenditure expenses in the children's Linking Words
charity
Use synonyms
was
1.6%Change the verb form
were
Add the comma(s)
, as well as the total number of expenditure in the children's charity,
as well as
the total Linking Words
number of
expenditure in the children's Correct quantifier usage
apply
charity
was $53,224,896.Use synonyms
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