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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

#food #support #population #country #insects #source #people #nature
For our future, countries are fully responsible to create
an efficient strategies
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 to meet the
humans
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human
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 needs
of
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for
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food
.
Although
,
Insects
 could be helpful to support their
food saving
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food-saving
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 plans.
This
 essay will
demonstrates
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on
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how important to make
a forward plans
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forward plans
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 to help
the
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society
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 needs
of
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food
.
Food
 is the fundamental unit of life, we cannot live for a few days without eating.
However
, the significant increase in population
,
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 will make the prosses of the availability of
food
 worst.
As a result
,
Insects
 could
by
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be
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 a great solution to help
the
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human being.
Moreover
,
people
 shall understand that there is no other
chooses
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, except develop the
insects
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insect's
insects'
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 quality to be
useful
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a useful
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 source of
foods
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food
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.
For instance
, because of the high population in China,
over
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 a billion
people
 living there, the government has developed the idea of eating
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an insect
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insect
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insects
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. Recently, they are living a good life with enough amount
food
. At
this
 point, the
insects
 are not dangerous for
human
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humans
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,
scientists
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and scientists
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 have approved. Contrary to what the studies have shown, eating
insects
 is not a favourable idea for many
people
. They believe, that the conventional
food
 source will be available for the rest of their lives.
On the other hand
, the reality doesn't meet their thoughts, traditional
food
 sources can’t help
the
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humanity for many years.
To conclude
, Unless the government take an action toward the continuous decrease of
amount
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the amount
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food
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of food
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. The
people
 will suffer from
this
 issue in the future. Good forward-looking is essential.
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