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People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, many
people
 argue that creativity is one of the most crucial qualities which could be gained. It is said that only extraordinary humans could lead the world. In fact,
people
 having original
ideas
 are generally more valued than
people
 who are able to copy well.
However
, sometimes stolen innovations could be realized much better than initial versions. On the one hand,
people
 creating innovative projects will always make more money and lead the companies. As an
example
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 we can recall any big corporation which was started by a creative
enteurpreneur
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entrepreneur
. If a CEO of a company followed
standart
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standard
 recommendations from business books, he would not be able to compete with others on the market.
On the other hand
, often great
ideas
 in business or science could not be realized properly.
Consequently
,
such
 innovations never reach their full potential.
For instance
, Mark Zuckerberg has stolen the idea of Facebook from
people
 who
was
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 not able to create it by themselves.
However
, he improved the initial project and realized it well.
Overall
, I can assume that in most cases
people
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 outstanding
ideas
 would be more
succesfull
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successful
 than
people
 who can not think outside the box.
However
, we know that in any rule there are exceptions. Sometimes, great innovations will never be realized because of
lack
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 of needed knowledge and understanding
how
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of how
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 to make them real.
Consequently
,
that is
 why some big corporations were created by a man with creative
ideas
 and a man who could realize them,
for example
, Apple.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Intellectual property
  • Economic growth
  • Cultural evolution
  • Adaptation
  • Diverse perspectives
  • Historical impact
  • Education systems
  • Rote learning
  • Critically evaluate
  • Status quo
  • Foster
  • Imitation
  • Dissemination
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