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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is true that there are a great number of
people
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 who have health issues
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 of consuming a lot of junk
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 in some countries.
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 others think that governments should imply high taxes on that type of
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. I completely disagree with the idea. On the one hand,
people
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 think that if the government decide to issue a law to increase taxes on fast
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, that will benefit the growing health problem caused by that kind of
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.
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, it is not effective with wealthy groups who have enough money to spend on junk
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such
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 as nuggets, burgers, and french fries.
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, the increase will have a huge effect on the restaurant industry, because most of them use in their menus fast
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. I consider that there are other solutions to that problem
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, I believe that there are better solutions to solve the rising health issues.
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, governments should build more playgrounds for children and
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 a fitness area near that for the adults. In that way, they will secure that all groups of age will have the access to move their bodies.
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, in South Korea all new buildings have gyms, playgrounds, and
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 some small parks near their house,
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,
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 have whole access to sports facilities.
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, authorities can advertise in schools, kindergartens, and universities about a healthy lifestyle.
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, I totally disagree that high officials should issue a law for increasing taxes on junk
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, it is a direct way but not effective with some groups of
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 and
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 can cause some disadvantages. There is a better solution to fix
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 problem and benefits in long term without any side effects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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