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Some people feel that petrol cars should be banned. Others feel that we should be allowed to drive petrol cars. Discuss both sides and giv e your opinion.

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The debate about whether petrol
cars
 should be allowed on the streets has become progressively intense
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these days.
While
 many people have proposed a complete ban on
cars
 which rely on oils,
this
 essay will discuss both the pros and cons of
this
 kind of proposal
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 and shed light on the importance of industrial transition. Petrol
cars
 had been a significant part of
motor
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the motor
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 industry.
Viehicles
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Vehicles
 when first invented were supplied with oils, they have been an indispensable part of
every day
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 life until the recent invention of efficient electric engines. Since oil is not renewable on earth, It is justifiable that there is a growing
societial vocie
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social voice
 calling for
replacement
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.
However
,
for
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those who want an immediate ban on petrol
cars
, many of them fail to recognize the auto industry has employed a considerable number of workers who are making
livings
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 out of it.
Hence
, an
industrical
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industrial
 transition is needed to mitigate the employment problem. The best way forward is for government-crafted policies to give compensation for member
staffs
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 who had worked in the outmoded auto
prodcutions
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productions
production
, and incentive these experienced professionals to participate in
clean
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 energy industry. In conclusion,
climate
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the climate
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 crisis has made it urgent for changes in
pulic
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public
 lifestyles. When it
come
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 to collective decision-making, societal problems are complex
due to
 their links to
public
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 interest,
thus
 carefully making
transition
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