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Some people believe that a gap year between school and university is a good idea, while others disagree strongly. Consider both sides of this debate and present your own opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that considering a
time
 before starting university is arguable.
While
 it is a commonly held belief that
student
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 must study directly after high
school
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both arguments and show my opinion. There
is
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 people
argue
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 that the benefits of
begining
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beginning
 university directly after
school
 considerably outweigh it
is disadvantages
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. The main reason for believing
this
 is that studying at
college
 immediately may be more convenient for
the
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students.
For instance
,
school
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the school
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teacher
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teachers
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 had reported that some students tend to forget important
concept
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 when they delay a term because of social circumstances. As result, learning immediately after
school
 might help them to save the memory of the
school
 subjects.
Thus
,
this
 makes it clear that leaving no
gap
 after
school
 may have some benefits for the candidates.
On the other hand
, some people argued that individuals must consider a
gap
 before
begining
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beginning
 to learn at
college
. People often have
this
 opinion because the
persons
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 may need some
time
 to rest and think before making a serious decision. To illustrate, a prestigious journal article published that 50% of individuals who had
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 before university
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 reported
a
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complete satisfaction in their jobs. Clearly, taking a period of
time
 may help the persons to make
their
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 mind and
decied
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decide
decided
 which major they may want to join. Indeed, it becomes
apparrent
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apparent
 that having some period before starting
college
 may be beneficial for
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individuals. In conclusion, both arguments have their merits. On balance,
however
, I believe that leaving a
gap
 would be better than learning immediately after
school
.
This
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 the fact that the persons might have a long
time
 to think and practice their future job before starting a
college
 field.
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