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Examine the arguments in favour of and against animal experiments, and come to a conclusion on this issue. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Animal experiments have long been a subject of heated debate. On one hand, many people argue that they are necessary for scientific and medical advancement. Countless treatments we rely on today—like vaccines, antibiotics, and even chemotherapy—were once tested on animals before they could be safely used on humans. Those in
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 believe it would be irresponsible to bypass
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 point out that, in many cases, current alternatives like computer simulations or tissue cultures still can’t fully replace a living organism when complex systems like metabolism or immunity are being studied.
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, growing awareness of animal rights has led many to question the morality of
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 practice. Animals, too, can feel pain and distress, and subjecting them to testing for human gain is often seen as exploitation. Critics argue that the suffering inflicted on laboratory animals is not justified, especially when some tests are repeated for cosmetic or commercial purposes rather than urgent medical research.
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, not all data from animal tests translates well to human biology, leading to failed human trials and, in rare but tragic cases, severe side effects. In recent years, technologies like “organ-on-a-chip” and AI
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 have shown promise as ethical and scientifically valid alternatives. In my opinion,
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 animal experiments have historically contributed to vital breakthroughs, their use should now be limited to the most critical cases where no other method provides reliable results. With modern advancements making non-animal testing increasingly effective, our responsibility should be to reduce and eventually eliminate
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task achievement
Your introduction clearly outlines the topic and presents both sides of the argument. However, a more explicit thesis statement would strengthen it.
coherence and cohesion
You provide a clear logical structure, with separate paragraphs for each argument. To improve coherence, try to use more linking phrases between your points.
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Examples are relevant, but adding one or two more specific examples could make your points stronger and more persuasive.
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You presented a balanced view by discussing both sides of the issue, which is commendable.
coherence and cohesion
Your writing is mostly clear and easy to follow, which helps convey your ideas effectively.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • controversial
  • prevalence
  • scientific research
  • proponents
  • opponents
  • medical breakthroughs
  • vaccines
  • treatments
  • critical data
  • regulatory frameworks
  • ethical guidelines
  • minimize suffering
  • moral objections
  • animal rights
  • species differences
  • unreliable results
  • alternatives to animal testing
  • in vitro testing
  • computer modeling
  • volunteer microdosing
  • nuanced
  • complexity
  • weighing
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