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Government should apply tax on unhealthy food to inspire people to eat healthy food which is beneficial for their health. Do you agree or disagree

#government #tax #food #people #health
the chart illustrates the
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percentage
 of three food substance in typical meals where
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they
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 unhealthy if they are consumed together.
overall
, as we can see in the
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breakfast
 it is the lowest percentage
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 all of them ,
whereas
 dinner
have
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 the highest
consumtion
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consumption
 rates except added sugar .
to begin
, sodium and saturated fat are being consumed the most at dinner where
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they
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rate
 from 43 to 37
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while
 they are being the lowest at snacks and
braekfast
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breakfast
 .
additionally
, both of them
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range
 from 26% to 29% at lunch ,which has the middle
consumtion
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consumption
rate
 between the others.
moreover
,
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added sugar
 has 42
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at
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 snacks ,which is the only material
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that
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 has
this
 significant
rate
 at
this
 meal.
furthermore
, as it is included in dinner ,where it
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 23% of it which
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apply
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is the second highest
rate
 after snacks.
however
, it
take
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 only from 16% to 19% in lunch and
breakfst
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breakfast
.
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