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Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. What the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective reducing crime

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The increasing crime worldwide among the younger generation could be affected by the following factors. There are a number of problems associated with
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 phenomenon, but
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 some straightforward measures we can prevent our young generation in the future. Perhaps the major factor is the lack of education for both
parents
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 and teenagers.
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soft skills help to make the best decisions for them. It could
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 be affected by
parents
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’ core parenting knowledge of
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’s lifestyles and desired outcomes for
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. Another cause is physical and online peer pressure; unfortunately, it was awfully developed in the social environment. A third factor is the violence in the
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 or social
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 living teenagers who are nerd techy generation with accessible internet and any devices. Probably, they are influenced by violent
media
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 without parental control. Turning to possible solutions, an obvious step would be to educate
children
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 and
parents
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 early. If we take
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 step, it would prevent bad decisions in any situation and provide proper guidance to well-educated
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. A second remedy might be spending quality time with
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, which is the most important way to prevent peer pressure. Learning from the victim’s peer pressure, they did not talk with their
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 or teachers for a long time.
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, against massive violence,
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 could use technologies or applications to limit time spent watching and surfing the Internet. In summary, education and spending on
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 appear to be the main causes. A coordinated response by the individual, family, and school may lessen the severity of the situation.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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