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You are going on a short training course at a college in Sydney, Australia. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it You do NOT need to write any address.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to seek information about the housing facility available on campus in your college for a period starting from August 25, 2025, until April 30 2026. My name is Smriti and I am a prospective student I have recently enrolled in the Personal Support Worker program which is for eight months. My training will commence on September 3, 2025,
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 I will be reaching Sydney on August 25, 2025. Since I will be coming to Australia for the first time and do not have any acquaintance there I would rely on the college accommodation services. I would prefer a private room with an attached bathroom and a kitchenette. I am willing to share the space with an Indian male only. I would
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 quotation by email and the all-inclusive price for the said requirements.Please ensure that the price includes the laundry services too
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 any terms and conditions of the proposed rental accommodation. Looking forward to hearing from you at the earliest. Yours faithfully Aman Mathur.

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task achievement
Include a brief introduction of your intent to stay at the college to set the context of the letter at the beginning.
coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking down your housing requirements into bullet points or a list to enhance clarity.
suitable writing tone
The tone of your letter is appropriate and polite, which is crucial for such requests.
complete response
You clearly stated your arrival date and the duration of your intended stay, which provides clarity to the accommodation officer.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation
  • officer
  • training course
  • require
  • private room
  • shared space
  • location preference
  • amenities
  • duration
  • internet access
  • complimentary breakfast
  • close proximity
  • available options
  • request
  • formal inquiry
  • short-term stay
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