Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among the young people. What the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective reducing crime?

Crime
appears to be increasing in most parts
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the world, particularly among young people.
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,
crime
has been directly and indirectly related to youth. The causes
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appear to be focused on three main problems that contribute to crimes. Lack of parental guidance can lead teenagers to delinquency. A child with instructions from a parent is
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and less prone to bad habits. And, Violence in the media and games can affect young people’s attitudes and
behavior
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. The games that young
people’s
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play are criminal;
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, mobile legends,
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etc.
Thirdly
,
lack
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of interest and direction can stray youngsters.
According to
the research, the group of young people who are involved in
crime
does not have their hobbies and does not do anything in their free
time
. Turning the possible solutions, Parents to take an active role in their child’s life. And, if
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the viewing
time
of violent films and online games
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perspective of youth
crime
will change.
Also
, the government should have supervised social clubs where youths can go in their free
time
, or schools should organize more interesting and involving extracurricular activities.
Overall
, the basic upbringing of youth is directly related to the family or parents. If young people
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in the right social environment and spend their leisure
time
in the right way (place), they can increase
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of not being involved in
crime
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