Some people say that instead of seeing the Internet as a way of opening up new communication possibilities world-wide, we should be concerned about the effect this is having on social interaction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Nowadays the majority of
people
tend to think that the
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network and other modern technologies can improve the
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capacity
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conversation,
although
other individuals consider that it is not
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and prospective approach, because it may have
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influence on
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ability of
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. I disagree with
this
statement and I will write several arguments to prove my opinion. First of all, in
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modern world
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of
people
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and have to work distantly so that they
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to communicate with many employees who are from various countries all around the world. It means that
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internet
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applies huge opportunities for individuals to
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their horizons and to be in touch with their friends or family even
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have been living in far places.
For example
, between 2019 and 2020, almost all
people
could interact with each
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other
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since Covid-19 had started and
people
had been living in strict
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;
however
:
this
pandemic disease could not stop connection among
people
.
On the other hand
, it was proved that citizens who have
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suffered from communication anxiety or had issues with overcrowded places, can easily make friends online without frightening
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self-esteem.
In other words
,
people
who feel as ignorant,
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and odd, can start to communicate on
internet
apps and
then
get used to
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sociable so that they can treat themselves from fear of speaking.
For instance
, recent research from Cambridge University has represented the
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of online networks on
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patients
who had been put up with
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or
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and felt work pressure so that they could not able to talk as
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person
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people
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.
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experiment where these
people
had to use Skype or another
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programme
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, it has found that more than 75
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of participants found
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and began to believe about returning to normal life. In conclusion, I think if
people
consume
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properly,
such
as for making good
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friends
and
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only benefits from it, they will not suffer
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the bad influence on
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and
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in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • digital platforms
  • face-to-face interactions
  • superficial relationships
  • cultural exchange
  • international relations
  • cyberbullying
  • misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • emotional connections
  • social stability
  • mental health
  • world-wide communication
  • social interaction
  • online interactions
  • instant messaging
  • social media
  • emails
  • virtual relationships
  • cross-cultural understanding
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