The diagram below gives information about the number of parcels delivered by two major mail services companies from 1920 to 2000.
The diagram depicts information about the number of parcels delivered by the two different companies from 1920 to 2000.
Overall
, TNT
mail
service
gradually increased and reached peak status and the FedEx
service
starting phase was sharply high and slow down after that fluctuating.
Firstly
, In 1920 most of the couriers were delivered by FedEx
compared to TNT
, which is 15000 moreover
two times higher than TNT
.After the decade TNT
was slightly higher but FedEx
gradually increased which is more than 15,000.
In 1940 FedEx
reached approximately 24000 and this
is the highest period in the given digraph and
the following decade Correct word choice
apply
deeply fallen
the Add the auxiliary verb
fell
has deeply fallen
service
rate which below 15000 .Service
rate stable from 1950 to 1960 , after that this
mail
,service
gradually increased their service
which is more than 15000 in 2000.
TNT
mail
service
gently increased from 1940 to 1960 after that slightly down in the following decade moreover
it was going to peak from 1980 to 1990 .In 2000 this
mail
service
reached nearly 25000 .
In Conclusion, Overall
we have seen the diagraphic information and it shows that TNT
couriers lead the highest number of services.Submitted by keyarthi on
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