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Over population in many major urban centers around the world is a major problem. What are the causes?

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That excessive
population
 exists in prime
cities
 all over the world is one of the vital troubles.
This
 essay will examine the main reasons for the problem and suggest some
way
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 around to get rid of
this
 issue. Two key factors which are
natural
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the natural
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 increase of
population
 and migration from rural
areas
; are mainly responsible for
rapid
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the rapid
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 growth of urban inhabitants. Fast and foremost,
due to
decline
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the decline
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of
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 child mortality rate as
consequences
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consequence
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 of public awareness and the improvement of
medical
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the medical
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 sector which are less noticeable in the past,
population
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the population
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 is increasing day by day in developed
areas
.
Additionally
, in order to have upgraded facilities
such
 as medical treatment, job opportunities and educational development which are available in
cities
, rural people tend to move from villages to towns.
For instance
, a large number of educational institutions, hospitals,
industries
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, are constructed
main
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 in
cities
 for which to satisfy their needs,
villagers
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and villagers
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 either alone or with family, are bound to migrate from their own village. Clearly, to overcome the situation,
government
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 has to take
required
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the required
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 action in
this
 regard with proper urban
plan
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 and decentralization.
Firstly
, if modern facilities which are mostly demanded can be availed from rural
areas
, rural people may not move from their own location.
Secondly
, to reduce the density
housing
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of housing
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 and unplanned road construction, an appropriate infrastructural plan and regulation should be introduced by
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authority
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 so that dwellers and builders can follow the guidelines
accordingly
.
To sum up
, because of natural growth and urban centralization,
cities
 are overloaded by
huge
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a huge
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population
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populations
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 which can be reduced by
development
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the development
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 of rural
areas
 and proper infrastructural plan in
cities
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overpopulation
  • urban centers
  • rural areas
  • job opportunities
  • education facilities
  • healthcare facilities
  • family planning
  • birth rates
  • infrastructure management
  • sustainable development
  • population control measures
  • urban planning
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