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Some people think an international car-free day is an effective way to reduce air pollution. Others think there are more effective ways to do this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In the present world, cars have become a necessity than a luxury. Having an international no-driving
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 may seem like a positive way to reduce atmospheric exploitation but it might hamper the community more than actually bring a positive change. I will discuss both sides and opine my views as to why
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 will not be effective in the near future. On one hand, transit machines contribute towards a major portion of atmosphere abuse. Planning an international no-driving
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 would have a major impact on decreasing atmosphere abuse.
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, in developed countries like America and Canada, where every household has at least two vehicles, one
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 of zero driving would heavily impact air deterioration. Stopping all transit in
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 countries will have a great impact on improving the breathable air.
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, with the help of growing technology, electric transportation means have become a reality now. These transit machines contribute nothing towards atmospheric abuse.
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, many nations have planned to completely end the use of non-electric vehicles in the next five to ten years. Implementing an international no-driving
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 will have a very minute effect in the immediate future. So, spending manpower and resources on
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 a thing might be futile.
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, planning
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 a holiday will be a major headache for the official agencies, as they would have to allow all emergency services, so it does not seem feasible to achieve.
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, celebrating an international no-driving
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 might look like an effective idea today, but it will become useless in the near future
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 the world developing transport means that produce almost zero air pollutants. Once the majority of society has shifted towards electric or similar transportation means, the expenses of planning an international no-vehicle
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 would exponentially become higher than the positive effect it produces on the environment

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • emissions standards
  • renewable energy
  • environmentally friendly
  • public transportation
  • pedestrian zones
  • commuter behavior
  • awareness
  • incentives
  • air pollution
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