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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situations outweigh the disadvantages?

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Following graduation, the pie chart displays the jobs that Anthropology
graduates
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 held, and the table displays their salaries after five years of
employment
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 in three different industries.
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, it is evident that most
graduates
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 found
employment
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 after completing their degree program, with the biggest percentage finding full-time work. Despite being a modest percentage, the number of people who finished their education was lower and on par with the unemployment rate. On average, people in
employment
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 made over $75,000 per year,
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 those working for the government and as independent contractors made more money than those employed by for-profit businesses. A little more than half of the
graduates
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 had full-time jobs,
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 the pie chart,
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 the percentages of part-timers and the unemployed were much lower (15% and 12%, respectively). The lowest percentages were for those combining part-time
employment
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 and higher education study, at only 5%.
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, the figures for postgraduate studies or unspecified occupations were identical (8% each).
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this
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, of those who had a definite destination, around three-quarters were in
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,
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 the remaining eight were either in education or unemployed.
According to
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 working for private companies had the lowest pay, with nearly half receiving wages between $25 and $74,999, 25% receiving $75 to $99,999, and only 30% receiving earnings exceeding $100,000. 5% of freelancers and government employees made between $25,000 and $49,999, 15% made between $50,000 and $74,999, and the remaining 80% made between $75,000 and more than $100,000.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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