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many students take partime jobs while studying in university , you think it’s a good idea or bad idea.

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Nowadays, many people like doing part-
time
work
while
 studying at university.
Although
 it costs them much free
time
, it is still a good opportunity that benefits their growth. On one hand, taking part-
time
jobs
 can help
students
 succeed in the job market after they graduate.
For instance
, when they seek a career, they have to learn how to make resumes and attend job interviews. During the preparation, they can develop social
skills
 and problem-solving abilities. These abilities are beneficial to their leadership and confidence.
By contrast
, those
students
 who lack
work
 experience will get into trouble finding a dream job because they do not have the necessary
skills
.
Also
,
work
 experience boosts
students
' performance and efficiency in their school activities. They can earn money and gain
time
 management
skills
 from their
jobs
.
On the other hand
, doing part-
time
jobs
 may cause problems in
students
' studies. It is difficult for them to balance their
work
 and study because part-
time
jobs
 may take up much study
time
. If they cannot manage their
time
 successfully, the working burden will harm their academic performance.
As a result
, they may lose interest in studying and even drop from school.
Furthermore
, part-
time
jobs
 may lead to health problems.
Work
 pressure not only lets
students
 lack
time
 to relax, but
also
 makes them feel anxious and stressed. In conclusion, part-
time
jobs
 have financial and social value.
Although
 they have some disadvantages,
students
 can still benefit from them as long as they have good
time
 management
skills
. It is expected that there will be more
students
 taking a part-
time
 career in the future.
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