more and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on endangered list. what are the reasons?

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In the world, one of the most beautiful species
are
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animals
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World
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is for them
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. In the modern era,increasing in the endangered list and
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extinction
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the extinction
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of wild
animals
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are more. To some extent, human activities are the cause of
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global Issue.
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disquistion
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discussion
delineates the cause,effect,suggestions and possible solutions for the
dilimma
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dilemma
. Generally speaking, People are very selfish. They don't want to know what problems happening on the other side. Society
torture
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animals
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for their
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produced from
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. For the
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they are killing
animals
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.
Substains
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like leather,blankets,
clothes
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are coming from
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. we all know that it is human needs but, by doing
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the list of endangered wild
animals
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are
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increasing.
Instead
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for
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harming the
animals
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,we need to do research for an alternate
sollution
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solution
for making
these kind
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of things. In India deer are
in
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the endangered list still people are hunting deer for making odour things. Countries should
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strong
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the
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rules and
punshiment
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punishment
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for saving the
animals
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Other
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reason for
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extinction
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the extinction
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animals
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is human
carelesness
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carelessness
, To cite an example, Driving
vechiles
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vehicles
through some restricted
forest
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area
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is
high
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chance of hitting
animals
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. Throwing things like plastic in the sea. It will
effect
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the underwater species and some people do even more
cruelity
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cruelty
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animals
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. Sometimes they camped in the
forest
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and make food. A spark of fire is enough for destroying the whole
forest
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and the
animals
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in the
forest
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will
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die.
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Government
Goverment
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and
public
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the public
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are equally responsible for
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animals
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extinction
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. The constitution for animal rights should focus more
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it. They should give
punshiment
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punishment
punishments
like imprisonment and huge fines need to implement.
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, Government should implement some
awarness
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awareness
programes
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programmes
programs
to
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the Public for saving
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extinction
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the extinction
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wild
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animal
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animals
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.
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in
future
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issue will vanish
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from
world
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